Seeking cover letter feedback from an HR professional

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I am applying for jobs and use several cover letters. As an HR professional, please advice which cover letter is best, why, and please give feedback/suggestions. Thank you in advance.

1. Dear (Company) Hiring Manager:

I am writing to express my interest in the position of Marketing Director, advertised as being open at this time with your company. I am a highly talented and award-winning Management professional with an extensive background in Marketing, Sales, Business Development, Corporate Communications, and Client Relations. My experience includes product and project management, traditional marketing, e-commerce, and project implementation. Now I would like to bring my expertise and knowledge to work for your company. 

My skills in marketing and product management, together with my ability to meet deadlines and work as a team player, have contributed to my success in my chosen field.  I have performed a wide variety of activities, including management of marketing, public relations, and customer communications programs for non-profit organizations, market and research analysis, and established policies and procedures. I have a record of designing and leading effective team, and have been recognized throughout my career for my ability to increase revenue and profitability while decreasing costs.

I am familiar with developing and implementing process improvements, and I have been successful in establishing multi-functional teams, managing accounts, and coordinating corporate involvement in conferences and industry events. My management experience also includes directing all phases of product development, from inception through deployment. I am adept at developing and conducting training programs.

An effective organizer and planner, my outgoing and friendly nature allows me to interact well with other staff members at all levels and I pride myself on bring the right measure of enthusiasm to the equation. 

The accompanying resume can give you an idea of my potential for making a worthwhile contribution to your company. I believe it may be a mutual beneficial for us to meet. Please feel free to call my cell (818) 795-4828  or email me with any questions or to set-up an interview.  I look forward to hearing from you.  

 

Kindly,

2. In response to your posting for an Operations Manager, I am enclosing my resume for your review. Given my proven record of work performance and experience in operations management and lean manufacturing, I would like to be considered for the position.

I pride myself on being a results oriented, hands-on individual with progressive management experience. My management style strongly emphasizes teamwork and the principles of lean manufacturing. An evaluation of my resume will further acquaint you with my background and qualifications for this position.

Your Requirements

   1. Bachelor’s degree and 5+ years of progressive management experience.

   2. Lean manufacturing training and/or certification; a black belt or other  

   significant training    

   in quality; and continuous improvement or kaizen experience are desirable.

   3. Applicant will be a quality fanatic, understand the requirements of ISO 

    certifications, and 

   have excellent communication, computer, and leadership skills.

My Qualifications

   1. BBA degree. Ten plus years of progressive manufacturing management 

   experience and  

   growth.

   2. Lean training through Walt Hancock, John Smith, and other programs. Six-

   Sigma and other 

   training in ISO and quality. Team building and C.I. training through Susan 

   Heathfield. Kaizen 

   experience through Company Name, Masco, and Toyota.

   3. Demonstrated leadership capability in driving operations excellence and 

    meeting goals and  

   objectives through teamwork, lean manufacturing, and a quality focus. 

   Quantifiable results achieved:

          --Reduced scrap and waste by 26%.

          --Delivery performance from 78% to 96%.

          --Reduced lead times by 80%.

          --Reduced complex setups by 74%.

In review of my resume, you will note my growth and experience. What it cannot illustrate, however, is the degree of dedication, resourcefulness, and professionalism that I can offer. A personal conversation will enable us to discuss how I can contribute to the success of your company. My salary requirements for this position are $00,000+. I look forward to pursuing this relationship with you in the near future.

Sincerely,

Candidate’s Name

3. Dear Talent Avenue recruiting team:

My name is Ally Garcia and I am writing to you today to further pursue my career objective in media & marketing by applying my seasoned experience as Talent Aveunue’s new candidate for full time positions.

As a true marketing startup enthusiast, I enjoy learning new things everyday and welcoming the unexpected. I have learned to thrive in the busy working atmosphere, exciting challenges, and fun ambiance.  

Over the years I have developed effective experience with project coordination in social media and consumer marketing that can be a constructive factor to Talent Avenue’s top-notch creative industry clients. With 2+ years curating creative content through various media channels in addition to a BA in Communications & Business Management, I hope you will agree my qualifications for the position are a perfect fit.

Most relevant as the Marketing & Customer Care Specialist at One Kings Lane, I have stimulated the critical connection of viral presence and consumer marketing. My main objectives are to create brand awareness through social media outlets, advertise our products to increase sales, and supporting customer inquiries. In addition to assisting marketing campaigns and maintaining vendor communication.

I am eager to show how my perseverance and enthusiasm will be a positive contribution to Talent Avenue’s growing brand.

I look forward to the possibility of a personal interview to further discuss my credentials with you. It would be a privilege to be a part of this dynamic team.

Kind regards,

Ally Garcia

4. Dear Pac 12 recruiting team:

I’m a senior VB developer with seven years of in-depth experience designing and developing three-tier application architecture. I am seeking an opportunity to Interview for the position of Production Assistant.

This position at Pac 12 excites me: I have the technical skills you need, and I’m ready to be challenged. My strong front-end user interface skills mean I can create an intuitive system that your clients can begin using immediately.

The description of the open position as a senior software developer suits me perfectly. As you would see from my resume I qualify for all required attributes expected for this job description but I would also like to know about your other expectations on this job. I look forward to meeting with you and I hope you would be more than satisfied with my qualifications here over the past 12 years of my experience as a software developer:

• A

• B

• C

• D

• E

I am available any time after 5pm on the weekdays, or during lunch time. It would be great to meet in person and answer any questions that you might have for me. It would be great if you can suggest a time that suits you the best.

I am looking forward to your reply to discuss the possibilities of making it as an employee of ABC (the name of the company you are applying for), it would be a privilege to be a part of this dynamic team. You may contact me at any time at my cell phone: 123 456 7890

Kindly,

HRforME

There is no "best"...each cover letter should be tailored to the specific company and specific job posting. To have a standard cover letter is the worst thing you could do.

Plus this sounds like a homework assignment seeing that all four cover letters are written for totally different jobs!